Green Sun -17- Thirsty Work

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hobiecart.gif "What would men like?" She glanced down. "Besides those."

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Green Sun
Chapter 17
Thirsty Work

by Donna Lamb

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"Eight packets high, five long, ten wide, one hundred bills per packet--I make it four million dollars if they are all hundreds." said Arthur. The other two men nodded.

"And if they are real money, not counterfeit," added Bruce.

They all watched the suitcase full of Ben Franklin portraits as if it might suddenly do something extraordinary like the chorus line scene from Blazing Saddles, perhaps. Mangas puffed placidly on his pipe. Arthur made ticking noises by clicking his ring finger nail against his thumbnail. Bruce tried to work out how a--dolly!--a girl like Hollie Dollie Hayes could come into possession of so much money, real or not.

"What are you smoking in that thing?" he suddenly asked Mangas.

The old Indian took his pipe out of his mouth and looked into the bowl as if suddenly curious himself. "Indian tobacco," he said. "Cured with vanilla bean, cinnamon, cherry, beet root, agave, wildflower honey and corn beer."

Arthur laughed. "He left out the owl spit this time."

"Indian tobacco?" asked Bruce.

"Grows wild all over the country, about six times more potent than the stuff they make cigarettes from." He shrugged. "I don't smoke much of it and I mix it with commercial tobacco usually."

"Sorry," said Bruce. "All that money made me think back to my first thought about that airplane."

Mangas nodded. "Drugs."

* * *

Inside the cabin, Hollie finally gave up on finding a mirror. Instead, she examined the parts of her body she could easily see. Her small hands with their delicate, painted nails. Her smooth, slender arms. Her long, shapely legs. Her abundant, bright blond hair which she could almost pull around her like a cape. It reached down long enough that she had to be careful not to sit on it. Her breasts.... Abruptly, she decided to see what the guys were doing outside.

She crept up on the cabin door and tried to listen through the chinks around the hand-planed door frame but the men were too far away, at the other end of the truck, for her to hear them clearly. The door latch operated as a simple pull up-and-in device, she had it open quickly and leaned against the opening to look out. She saw Mangas take a step back away from the truck and wink in her direction.

She giggled. Mangas was funny and didn't scare her like the idea of meeting Bruce again. But she still couldn't hear what they were saying very well. She eased the door closed again and wagged her head in a gesture she must have seen somewhere. "Well, Hollie, if that's your name," she asked herself, "what now?"

The men outside scared her but she wanted to meet them. She frowned. Why? That thought scared her, too. Bruce she'd already met and.... Okay, don't think about that, either. "I used to be a man," she said out loud. She remembered that, remembered the demons changing her...but were her memories real? She sighed. She didn't remember much about being a man or much in the way of details of her former life at all. Like her name, Hollie almost sounded right but not really.

She knew she'd been alone in the airplane which implied that she had been flying it, a totally impossible thought at the moment when she had trouble opening doors. "Hope Mangas is right," she whispered. He'd said she would remember more later. She trusted him, though she could not say why.

She looked around the room again, hoping for inspiration. "I want to go out there, but I need...." She didn't know what she needed. A reason? An excuse? "What do I know about being a girl, why would a girl go out there?" Duh. To meet the men. She blushed.

"I should take them something, like food," she decided. "That's what a girl would do. They might be thirsty or..." She stopped talking and looked at the icebox. "What would men like?" She glanced down. "Besides those."

* * *

"Somebody will report the plane crash," said Arthur. "It made a heck of a tall smoke." He nodded in the general direction of the still visible column of greasy gray smoke. "And it ain't that far from Christmas. Someone's probably already on their way out there."

Bruce nodded. "Yeah, they'll find the plane and the body and, well, who knows what else? Can't quite figure out why she was out there naked.... You don't ride around in an open cockpit plane with no clothes on."

"There are any number of logical explanations," said Mangas. "One of them may even be true."

"Thanks a lot, Chief Confucius," said Arthur. Bruce chuckled and Mangas made his gurgling noise.

"This money complicates things," said Bruce. "Whether it's real or not, we should turn it in."

"Why?" asked Arthur. "Maybe it belongs to Lady Mysterious?"

"How could it?"

"Same way she lost her clothes?"

Bruce shook his head. "It's got to be illegal to find that much cash and not report it."

"Sure, 'cause the government wants that money and they sure ain't the ones that lost it."

Bruce frowned. "What if whoever it does belong to comes looking for it?"

"Now that's one reason to turn it in..." Arthur began.

They all heard the cabin door open this time and moved so they could see. Hollie came out the door carrying a plate and three tall cans of beer. She smiled at them nervously, standing there in er short dress and high heels, blond hair floating around her. "Bet you guys are thirsty, huh?" she said.

"Wow," said Arthur.



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Three into three goes ...

Three cans of beer.

Hum, I think the guys would have really liked to sample *Besides those* but the beer will do and it divides up better.

Mangas must have been a hoot in the Marines, the BS mixed with truth he must have fed his fellow Marines.

In this new timeline/life for Holly, whose money is it and who was the pilot?

As to Holly: I keep thinking of this diembodied head talking to a humanoid cat, a slobby man, an mechamoid and a hologram of a pompous born looser.

John in Wauwatosa

But you're not a scientist. Surely you believe in all this superstitious nonsense. (MAD Magazine)

Could be worse, could be raining. (Young Frankenstein)

But you're not a scientist. Surely you believe in all this superstitious nonsense. (MAD Magazine) Could be worse, could be raining. (Young Frankenstein)

Good at math

Considering how poorly she's been doing intellectually, I'm surprised she brought the right number of beers. ::grin::

As for Holly, are you suggesting something about a tornado? ::smile::

Donna Lamb, flack

Donna Lamb, flack

It seems to me

I just get the strangest feeling that someone is going to have a Hollie Jolly Christmas before this is over. Yes ... I went there ... sorry.

Reporting the money is not the problem. If Bruce had just found Hollie in the desert with a suitcase full of money, everything would be fine. Unfortunately, he found her at the scene of a fatal air crash and by removing the suitcases he has tampered with evidence and Hollie is a witness, even if she doesn't remember anything. Since the NTSB investigates ultralight crashes involving fatalities they're dealing with the Feds.

I'm presuming the body in the ultra-light will be identified as Hobie Carson. I know they have speculated that it's Hollie's supposed husband, but it makes more sense that it would be Hobie - besides there's more potential for mayhem if there's a husband lurking out their somewhere.

Sincerely,

Scott

Calvin: You can't just turn on creativity like a faucet. You have to be in the right mood.
Hobbes: What mood is that?
Calvin: Last-minute panic.

Sincerely,

Scott

Calvin: You can't just turn on creativity like a faucet. You have to be in the right mood.
Hobbes: What mood is that?
Calvin: Last-minute panic.

Tampering with a witness

It's not the suitcases Bruce want to tamper with! ::grin::

Yeah, it's going to be Alphabet City in a Desert Place there soon, looks like. The NTSB, DEA, DHS, FBI, ICE could all get involved, and Bruce left tire tracks.

Potential Husband sounds like a sitcom title, like Bachelor Father and Starter Wife. ::lol::

Donna Lamb, flack

Donna Lamb, flack

Green stuff

I've already posted a comment at BC but since most post here I'm re-posting it here.

It's occurred to me that you're being as difficult on the the guys as on Hollie. I mean come on, here they are after just discovering the mother lode and then surprise, here comes Hollie who is pretty much a male fantasy come to life standing in the door with beer. If she hadn't had her brains scrambled by big bad Bill she probably tell them to leap off the mountain and they would. As things stand right now she is more likely to leap on them!

Okay enough silliness! She needs a protector until her she can heal and recover. The boys seem able to handle this and while they aren't knights with hearts of gold they'll do. The other point is the money. Until we have some clue about it's origin and who is coming after it who can say what is going to happen. With that much Green stuff someone is on their way.

You have made Bruce into a likable character. A little rough around the edges maybe but a good man to have at your back. I can't help but picture him as Tom Selleck. Hollie keeps insisting on appearing like a young Goldie Hawn. Arthur hasn't been picky about his looks as of yet, but Mangas just keeps grinning like a Cheshire Cat puffing away on his pipe.
hugs!
grover

Plan? Ain't got no Plan!
"Beyond Thunder Dome"

Plan? Ain't got no Plan!
"Beyond Thunder Dome"

Recycled reply, too

You mean Hollie makes things hard for them? ::smirk::

Tom Sellek would be nearly perfect, I never imagined Bruce with a moustache but I never said he didn't have one either. ::grin::

The guy I'd been thinking of, who could play either Bruce or Arthur was old time TV actor Clint Walker.

Hollie does have that, "How did I get here?" look Goldie owns the patent on, doesn't she? But Hollie is much shorter and more stacked. There was a British actress in some movies thirty years ago who had that look along with a sort of "Pinch me, I dare you," sauciness. Can't think of her name or the bad British movies I saw her in either. ::grin::

-- Donna Lamb, Flack

Donna Lamb, flack

She did!

Donna she did miscount! She didn't count herself!

I went to great lengths not to say "hard"!!!

Think about all the temptation she is offering them right now. Lust and greed are the two easy ones.

Alphabet soup indeed but don't forget the USSS (United States Secret Service) if counterfeit bills are involved.

Hugs!
grover

Plan? Ain't got no Plan!
"Beyond Thunder Dome"

Plan? Ain't got no Plan!
"Beyond Thunder Dome"

No beer

I think Hollie mentioned that she doesn't like beer. Perhaps Mangas will make some sun tea for her. ::grin::

Donna Lamb, flack

Donna Lamb, flack

Joanna Lumley maybe?

Of The New Avengers, AbFab and such.

She's might be your actress but if you are willing to go more more recent, say Catherine Zeta Jones a dozen years ago? Or go WAY back to the late 1960s and a young Dolly Parton in her Porter Wargner sidekick days.

I agree, Goldie had giggly Blonde ditz down to a science -- it took a very intelegent woman to pay that dumb that well -- but she sadly lacked in the boobie department. But then I am from America's Dairyland.

Continuing in reverse order.

Okay, for Magnus, I nominate Graham Green of Dances With Wolves, Northern Exposure, The Red Green Show? A little young but with makeup ...

Lastly Donna, no, no, no, no! Not the Wizard of Oz, think the BBC's Red Dwarf.

John in Wauwatosa

But you're not a scientist. Surely you believe in all this superstitious nonsense. (MAD Magazine)

Could be worse, could be raining. (Young Frankenstein)

But you're not a scientist. Surely you believe in all this superstitious nonsense. (MAD Magazine) Could be worse, could be raining. (Young Frankenstein)

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Joanna Lumley never looked innocent enough to be the girl I'm thinking of. ::grin:: My girl was one of the page 3 types who did a few Hammer films or some such and had a nice shape and a lovely squeal. But a young Lumley would work. ::smile::

Graham Greene could easily do Mangas.

Red Dwarf! Doh! ::lol::

Donna Lamb, flack

Donna Lamb, flack

Ingrid Pitt from the Hammer horror films?

Her maybe?

John in Wauwatosa

But you're not a scientist. Surely you believe in all this superstitious nonsense. (MAD Magazine)

Could be worse, could be raining. (Young Frankenstein)

But you're not a scientist. Surely you believe in all this superstitious nonsense. (MAD Magazine) Could be worse, could be raining. (Young Frankenstein)

Nope

Lady I'm thinking of is a blonde, though Ingrid would make a stunning DiD! ::grin::

Donna Lamb, flack

Donna Lamb, flack

Review on Green Sun

I realize that I should be providing more constructive criticism, but I have read all of the segments so far (mainly because I am a compulsive reader), and I must admit to feeling completely lost. The story jumps around so much that I probably will not read any more of it. There doesn't appear to be a consistent plot line. It's not that I have never written anything...I have written four books (albeit technical, not fiction) but I havbe also edited material for Maggie Finson, and offered to do so for Lorraine B.
Sorry about the lack of constructive ideas.

Please don't give up yet

The first fifteen chapters were prologue, in effect. The next several, ten or a dozen or more will concentrate on Hollie and the cabin in the desert. Hollie's story is the centerpiece of the tale of the Green Sun.

And by the way, that was very effective constructive criticism. ::smile:: I spent too long setting things up while the storyline crystallized in my mind. I'd already come to that conclusion.

Most of the characters are in place, I'll revisit the other storylines eventually but they are tangential at best like Rodney's story or peripheral like Susie and the twins.

This kind of writing is like riding a unicycle on a highwire, very hard to recover ifyou start to makea wrong turn. ::grin::

Maybe I should go back to posting weekly summaries on BC instead of dual posting the dailies?

Donna Lamb, flack

Donna Lamb, flack